The map shows a public park (Grange Park) when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The map shows a public park (Grange Park) when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The map shows a public park (Grange Park) when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The maps
shows
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show
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the development of
current
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the current
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time compared to
the
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apply
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1920 when a public
park
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was built.
Overall
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,
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park
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the park
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under
gone
Verb problem
undergone
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remarkable renovation
from
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since
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1920, which can be seen in
current
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the current
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map.
In addition
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, today`s Grange
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park
Fix capitalization
Park
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have
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has
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new
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a new
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water feature, cafe and
ampitheatre
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amphitheatre
for
concert
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concerts
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,
while
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some
attrections
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attractions
changed
Verb problem
have changed
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their location
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such
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, such
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as
rose
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the rose
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garden
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and seats.
Firstly
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, in
northwest
Fix capitalization
Northwest Park
show examples
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park
Punctuation problem
park,
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has
Wrong verb form
the seats have been
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removed
seats
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apply
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and
rose
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the rose
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garden
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remained
at
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in
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original
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its original
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place,
while
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in
soutwest
Correct your spelling
Southwest
seats
was
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were
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also
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removed and
new
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a new
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amphitheatre has been built for purpose of concerts.
Moreover
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, both
entrences
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entrances
of
south
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the south
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and
north
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the north
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remained
at
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in
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same
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the same
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place in
middle
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the middle
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.
Lastly
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,
rose
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the rose
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garden
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and pond for water plants
was
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were
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converted into
cafe
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a cafe
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and play
garden
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for
children`s
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children
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in
northeast
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the northeast
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, water feature replaced the glasshouse in the southeast.
Furthermore
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,
new
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a new
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carpark
Use the right word
car park
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has been built in the southeast, which
create
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creates
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one more entrance
im
Correct your spelling
in
the east,
while
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in the centre of
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park
Correct article usage
the park
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fountain
replaced
Verb problem
has been replaced
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with
rose
Correct article usage
a rose
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garden
Use synonyms
and chairs.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words park, garden with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • park
  • open
  • features
  • pond
  • trees
  • playground
  • walking paths
  • benches
  • sports
  • facilities
  • entrance
  • pathways
  • car park
  • visitors
  • families
  • events
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