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Many people nowadays change career more frequently than ever before while others stick to a single job. What are the advantages and disadvantages of changing career?

Now a days
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, many people prefer changing their jobs often, rather than
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 continuing the same profession
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 various reasons,
that
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 causes them
unsatisfaction
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. In
this
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pros
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 and cons of changing careers on a frequent basis, and will explicate my point. First and foremost, the advantage of switching
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job
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 is
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 that it provides an opportunity
to
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 the individual to earn better. If a person is not satisfied with the monetary benefits
tha
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that
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t his
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job
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 provides, they find a
job
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 where
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 they can have an increased income, and
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 a better lifestyle.
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, most
of
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medical and non-medical graduates in India
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 look for government jobs in
banking
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the banking
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 or post-office sector, as it pays them better, and
thus
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give
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 them an opportunity to improve their living.
On the other hand
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, if a person is changing his career line
oftenly
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often
, it decreases his chances of promotion and improvement. If an
indiviual
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individual
 does not stay put at any profession, they will always be left at the base level of the profession, since they are not sticking around
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 for enough time required
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 to grow and improve
at
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in
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 the
work place
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, as they are not consistent.
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, in
indonesia
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Indonesia
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, companies do not accept ex-workers, because they are considered disloyal and inconsistent. Conclusively, I would say there are both advantages and disadvantages of choosing
different
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a different
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 career line, but
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 it depends on how often a person is doing that.
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 changing a
job
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 may bring more money for some people,
however
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, if they are doing it on a regular basis may cause professional harm to them.

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strength
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • career transition
  • job satisfaction
  • income potential
  • network expansion
  • skill set diversification
  • personal growth
  • adaptability
  • job security
  • retraining cost
  • career progression
  • high-demand field
  • employment instability
  • professional development
  • industry experience
  • job market
  • employer perception
  • career ladder
  • commitment
  • reliability
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