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Robots and artificial intelligence are being developed to replace humans in the workplace. Why is this happening? Do you think this wil have a positive or negative impact on society?

The introduction of technologies
such
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robotics
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 and artificial intelligence in workplaces has
occured
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occurred
 to replace
humans
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human
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 ways of
work
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.
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 is because there is a high need for processing
of
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apply
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requests faster and
more
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a greater
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 demand for efficiency.
This
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 is a positive impact as
this
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 has helped change the type of
work
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 people now do in society.
To begin
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 with, over the years, there has been a high need to scale businesses, meaning more demand to process requests faster and demand for efficient system processes.
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 has brought about digitising repetitive tasks through
use
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 of
robotics
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especially
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, especially
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 when interacting with legacy systems.
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, in banks, when processing foreign exchange transfers, the process would normally take two days to complete
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however
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, with the introduction of
robotics
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,
this
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 process now occurs within a day. Customer satisfaction has been raised and has enabled what would normally be a pain point
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 customers to something
that is
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nolonger
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no longer
 an issue. The introduction of artificial intelligence to
preampt
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preempt
 ways of
work
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 has a positive impact on society.
This
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 enables manual
work
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 to be done by
robotics
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 and
enable
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enables
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 humans to focus on
high impact
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work
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.
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, humans would focus on developing ideas that customers would need or want.
This
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 would allow people to be in touch with their creative nature and produce
high value
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high-value
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 services and products. In conclusion, technology will replace manual and repetitive tasks done by individuals
at
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in
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the workplaces
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workplaces
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workplace
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.
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 will improve services and products produced and scale up businesses to
accomodate
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accommodate
 the high volume of requests.

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structure
Plan your essay with a clear idea for each paragraph; use one main point per paragraph.
language
Fix spelling and grammar mistakes; check words like occured, nolonger, preempt, and accomodate.
coherence
Use linking words like and, but, also, however to make flow clearer.
content
Add more real examples or facts to back your point and avoid vague claims.
content
Give a balanced view by showing both sides and state your own clear position in the end.
content
Idea that tech can speed up work and help client need.
structure
There is a clear intro, body and conclusion.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Automation
  • Efficiency
  • Cost-effective
  • Innovation
  • Technological advancements
  • Job displacement
  • Economic disparity
  • Dependency
  • Cyber-attacks
  • Ethical concerns
  • Moral questions
  • Standard of living
  • Income gap
  • Widespread automation
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