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Band 4.5

You have bought some clothing online and are not satisfied with your purchase. Write a letter to the company that you bought the clothing from. In your email •give details of the purchase •describe the problem •explain why you need a replacement urgently

Dear
sir
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i
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 am writing
this
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 letter to draw your attention .
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 bought the clothes from
zara
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Zara
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.
but i
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But I
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 am not satisfied
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I
purchase
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 many
type
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types
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 of clothes
there
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 are 2 jeans
4
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, 4
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shirts
and
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 2 long coats
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am give
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 my email on your online site
my
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 [email protected]
you
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You
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 can
cheak
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check
 on mail .
i
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I
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 put all
detiles
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details
 on your site .
there
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 are problems
in
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 all
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the cloathes
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cloathes
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clothes
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.in
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In
long
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coat
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coat,
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i
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 need
XL
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an XL
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 size
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 the black
one
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apply
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coat
size
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is size
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 L.
in
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 shirts
which
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 one staff
your
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 site
say
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 they
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totally opposite
i
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? I
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 need full
cotten
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cotton
 shirts
but
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 you
send
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sent
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 me silk
fiber
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fibre
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.
i
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I
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 need black
couler
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colour
 but both
jeanes
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jeans
 blue
couler
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colour
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i
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goining
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going
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the
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my
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sister
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sister's
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merrage
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marriage
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.that
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way
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i
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bought
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buy
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 black long coats
i
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 need very urgently replacement for
cloaths
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clothes
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specially
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 long
coat
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coats
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.
the
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 black one only
suit
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suits
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with my
pant
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pants
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 or shirt .
i
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 hope you can
understant
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understand
 my problem.
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 can wait
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postive
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positive
 response. your fathfully
mohinder singh brar
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Mohinder Singh Brar
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structure
Put one idea in each paragraph. Break the text into clear parts: what you bought, what is wrong, what you want.
greeting closing
Use proper start and end. Start with Dear Sir or Madam. End with Yours faithfully.
language
Make the long text short. Use short sentences. Do not use too many ideas in one line.
content
State the order number and date. Say you need a replacement soon.
content
You show you want a fix and tell why speed is needed.
content
You list the items bought.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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