The chart below shows the number of girls per 100 boys enrolled in different levels of school education. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of girls per 100 boys enrolled in different levels of school education. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The chart below shows the number of girls per 100 boys enrolled in different levels of school education. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
‏The chart below shows the
number
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of
girls
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per 100boys enrolled in different levels of school
education
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. ‏The target for both developed and developing
countries
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is 100
but
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, but
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from what we see in developing
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countries
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countries,
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the
number
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of enrolled
girl
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girls
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goes down from primary
education
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having
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, having
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the highest
number
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of enrolled
girls
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but
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, but
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tertiary level of
education
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having
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has
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the lowest. ‏In developed
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countries
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countries,
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it's actually the opposite.
According to
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the chart
tertiary
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, tertiary
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education
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had 105 enrolled
girls
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in 1990
and
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, and
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in
1998
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1998,
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the
number
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rose to 112
girls
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enrolled
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enrolled,
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while
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primary
education
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had 95
girls
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and
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, and
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it went up to 96 in
1998
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1998,
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with minor changes. ‏Overview: the targeted
number
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of enrolled
girls
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in both developed and developing
countries
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is 100
girls
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, in
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. In
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developing
countries
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the
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, the
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number
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of enrolled
girls
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had slightly risen from 1990 to 1998
but
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, but
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went down
from
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at
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each level of
education
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,
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.
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but
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apply
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in
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In
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developed
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countries
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countries,
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there isn't much of a change other than the
number
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rising from each
education
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level

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 91%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, girls, education, countries with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "goes down" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • chart
  • number
  • girls
  • boys
  • enrolled
  • education
  • primary
  • secondary
  • higher
  • ratio
  • indicate
  • barriers
  • accessible
  • significant
  • decline
  • pursuing
  • features
  • comparisons
  • gender
  • equality
  • societal
  • norms
  • progress
  • issues
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