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Some people think that getting a degree from univerity is the best way to secure a good job. Others believe that employers value work experience more than a university degree. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Angsa

Over the
last
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 few years, the demand
of
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for
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 college
digree
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degrees
 for
job
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application
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applications
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 has increased significantly.
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, some individuals believe that a
well qualified
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well-qualified
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 person has more chances to get
better
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a better
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job
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 position.
However
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, others consider that
field
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the field
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 of
experience
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 should be prioritised.
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,
i
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I
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 will prefer the field of study more as it
provide
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provides
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 deeper knowledge.
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 with, why
the
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does the
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work
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experience
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demands
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demand
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 more in the process of
job
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 application
.
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?
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Hence
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, its most significant benefit is that it
develop
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develops
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the
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apply
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problem solving
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problem-solving
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 skills, often resulting
not
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in not
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 only
to enhance
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enhancing
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 the proficiency but
also
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reduce
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reducing
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 the time to finish the
work
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.
In other words
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, workers with previous
experience
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 can finish the
work
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 faster, as they have already done the same
job
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 many times, and less chance of encounter issue in
work
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, even if they unfortunately face any problem,
then
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 they can easily deal with it because they have been practically solved the obstacles, and have become habutal ot it , which directly saves the time .
For example
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, a truck driver with
experience
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 is
immensely demanded
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in more demand
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 than
the
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a
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 driver just with
licence
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a licence
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, because
experienced
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an experienced
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 driver can back and hook the trailer faster and accurately.
On the other hand
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, employees should be hired on the
base
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basis
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 of
proper
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a proper
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 certificate or
digree
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degree
, as with education,
worker
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workers
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 would be informed thoroughly about all the aspects of
work
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 and less
chaces
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chances
 of accidents. Whenever people join any institute or school to gain
experience
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,
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then
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apply
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they learn everything
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such
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, such
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 as
,
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apply
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 rules,
regulation
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regulations
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 and
policy
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policies
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.
Consequently
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, workers would be
awaree
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aware
about
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of
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 the outcomes if they break the policy.
For instance
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, if a worker without proper knowledge handles
industry
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an industry
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 chemical without understanding
satefy
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safety
 measures can cause
the
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apply
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problems not only for himself but
also
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 for others. In conclusion, despite the few potential advantages of
work
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experience
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,
i
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I
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 strongly recommend
to appoint
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appointing
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 any staff member
at
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to
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work
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place
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workplace
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, appropriate education and
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a licence
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licence
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license
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is
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are
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literlly
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literally
 significant.

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grammar
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organization
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content
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language
Keep your words short and use common words. Do not use long or new words.
structure
The essay tries to cover both views.
argument
A view is stated at the end.
example
An example is given about a truck driver.
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