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Band 4

Water is a natural resource that should be free. The government should ban the sale of bottled water. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The issue of bottled
water
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 being sold when
water
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 is found in nature and
there for
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therefore
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 being
for
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apply
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free, has become a subject of discussion in recent years.
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 some argue that there should be a ban
set
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on selling packaged
water
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, I believe that bottled
aqua
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water
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 should not be priced and sold since it is found in nature.
Firstly
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, a 2019 study in Canada went
indepth
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in-depth
 on why 70% of the population favoured spending money to consume packaged
water
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 over drinking the free tap
water
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 available in almost every household. The study resulted in almost all of the consumers having the same answer,
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noticing
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, noticing
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 feeling much safer drinking filtered and purified
water
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 since knowing it undergoes multiple purifying stages,
in addition
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 to the levels of
indepth miniral
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in-depth mineral
striping
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 steps
while
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 still maintaining those our body needs
making
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, making
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 it drinkable.
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, I strongly agree with banning bottled
water
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being sold
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since every living creature needs
water
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 for survival and staying
alive
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alive,
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 as it is an essential. To add, those who are low on money shouldn't have to be stripped
from
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of
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 their human needs
as well as
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 rights by having no access to clean
water
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; being
underprivilaged shouln't
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underprivileged shouldn't
 be a reason to be looked at as less worthy of consuming clean bottled
water
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.
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,
although
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 people want to continue purchasing packaged aqua stating the benefits of
water
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 bottles, the need
clean
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for clean
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water
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 to be free and easily accessed,
overweighs
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outweighs
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 the reason
of
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for
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 banning.
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, I strictly agree with banning packaged aqua since every human needs it for
survival
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survival,
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 as it is an essential and can easily be found in nature.

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planning
Make a clear plan before you write. Use 1 intro, 2 or 3 para for body, and 1 short conclusion.
structure
Put one main idea in each paragraph. Use small, easy words and link ideas with 'and', 'but', 'so' or 'therefore'.
content
Give real facts or keep ideas simple. Explain how each point shows your view.
language
Watch spelling and grammar. Read the text aloud to find mistakes and fix them.
content
Keep to the task. Do not add too many ideas that are not about the topic.
task
Your position on the topic is clear.
structure
You try to give reasons.
structure
There is a closing sentence that repeats the idea.

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • natural resource
  • basic human right
  • public health
  • environmental impact
  • plastic pollution
  • infrastructure
  • clean drinking water
  • reusable bottles
  • waste reduction
  • access
  • convenience
  • refill stations
  • public water fountains
  • pricing system
  • conservation
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