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The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Panama City from 2010 to 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Panama City from 2010 to 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the crime rates of burglary,
car
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theft
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, and
robbery
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 in Panama
city
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City
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 from 2010 to 2019.
Overall
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, burglary experiences a sharp decline,
whereas
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car
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theft
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 and
robbery
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 remain relatively unchanged. In 2010,
burglary
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the burglary
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 rate was below 3,500 and increased
up
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to approximately 3,700 the next year.
However
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,
it is clear that
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 the number decreases dramatically until 1,200 in 2015, and ended at 1500 in 2019.
On the other hand
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,
car
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theft
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 and
robbery
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 show
the
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a
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 similar trend throughout the years. In terms of
the
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apply
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car
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theft
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, the number started from 2,700 in 2010, and it declined sharply
at
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to
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 2,000 in
2013
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2013,
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 though it showed
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an upwards
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upwards
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upward
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and
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trend and
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a downwards
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downwards
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downward
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until
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trend until
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 2019. The
robbery
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 rate is significantly low
compare
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compared
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 to the other
climes
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cities
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, with 600 in 2010
and
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, and
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 it remains about the same in 2019.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words car, theft, robbery with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Crime rates
  • Fluctuated
  • Significant spike
  • Consistent trend
  • Prevalent
  • Cumulative change
  • Enforcement
  • Correlate
  • Reduction/increase in crime
  • Categories of crime
  • Level of crime
  • Period of time
  • Analysis
  • Data representation
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