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in many countries, younger people are forgetting their old and traditional languages. is this accepted? discuss both sides of this issue?

We are witnessing a large number of younger
people
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 who
forgotten
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have forgotten
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 their own
language
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,
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 and know nothing about their traditions, so is
this
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exceptable
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acceptable
 or is it a serious problem that nowadays are struggling from
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 Forgetting your own
language
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due to
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 not
practicing
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 it enough,
for example
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,
people
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 who are living far away from their home
contry
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country
, they can't speak their
language
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so
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, so
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 they
steek with
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speak
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 English for many years till they start forgetting everything.
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However
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 some
people
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 think of it as an issue
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 could anyone possibly forget who they are? Our
language
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 and traditions it is important it what's
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makes
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make
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 us who we are
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mostly
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most
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 old
people
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 intend to be fanatics and sensitive about
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 subject. In conclusion, even if the person was forced to be away from their
country
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 they must be discreet about their
language
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also
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as well as
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 their traditions.
studies
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has
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 shown an increase of 47% of
people
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 who speak English more than their own
language
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planning
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structure
Write a short intro and a short end. State your view at the end.
language
Use clear and easy words. Check if verbs and nouns fit.
content
Add one real example for each side to show you know the topic.
content
You try to cover both sides of the issue.
language
Your words are simple and easy to read.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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