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the pie charts below show the percentage of housing owned and rented in the UK in 1991 and 2007. Summarize the information by describing the main features of the charts and making comparisons where appropriate.

the pie charts below show the percentage of housing owned and rented in the UK in 1991 and 2007. Summarize the information by describing the main features of the charts and making comparisons where appropriate.
The pie chart below shows the percentage of owned and rented houses in the UK in 1991 and 2007. In
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 I will discuss the differences that are given in the information by describing the main features. In 1991, the majority of
homes
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 were owned, which was almost 60
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 out of 22 million
homes
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 23
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 of the
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 were socially rented, 10
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 were privately rented,
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 were under social housing. In
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 we can see drastic changes except for private renting, starting with the number of
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 increasing to 27 million, and the percentage of home owners increasing to 70
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.
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, the number of social renters decreased to 17
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 social housing
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 went down to 2
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. Conclusion: from 1991 to 2007, home ownership increased from 60% to 70%
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 the number of socially rented and social housing
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 decreased.
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 renting didn't change and stayed at 11%

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words homes, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • owned
  • rented
  • housing
  • show
  • decreased
  • increased
  • shift
  • trend
  • years
  • common
  • prices
  • economic
  • changes
  • people
  • homes
  • compared
  • specific
  • features
  • main
  • information
  • around
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