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Writing Samples
Band 2

People have different job expectations for jobs. Some people prefer to do the same job for the same company, whereas others prefer to change jobs frequently. Write about the advantages and disadvantages of each viewpoint? Q

When we
considering
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consider
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jo
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job
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 expectations, each viewpoint
have
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has
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 its own set of advantages and disadvantages.
First,
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let's talk about the
disavantages
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disadvantages
. More
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company
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companies
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 have a clear career path,
such
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 as
teacher
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a teacher
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,and
then
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 head teacher and
then
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 to become a principal. These
positin
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positions
 usually require employees to
wokr
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work
 in the same
company
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 for a long time before they can be promoted.
This
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 means that
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salary
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the salary
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increase
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increases
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 with the employee's position. When
poeple
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people
to
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apply
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change their
job
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 frequently usually start from a low
positin
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position
.
Moreover
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, when
people
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 stay long with one
company
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, the
reletionship
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relationship
of
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anthoner
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another
 colleague is
more deepper
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deeper
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 like a
famliy
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family
,
that
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which
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mean
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means
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people
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 will have more happiness. When
people
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 change to
other
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another
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job
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, they should be adapt to new environments and interpersonal
relatinships
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relationships
. For the advantages,
job
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 changes often
agin
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against
 a wide range of
skill
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skills
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 and
expriences
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experiences
, making them adaptable and versatile in the
job
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 market.
In addition
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, switching
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job
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jobs
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 can lead to
better
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a better
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salary
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. Some
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company
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companies
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 provide higher
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salary
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salaries
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 to attract talent. If
people
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 have
ability
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the ability
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 to do some
taks
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tasks
 better, these
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company
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companies
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 may
hrie
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hire
 these
people
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 for
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a higter
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higter
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higher
salary
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 than before.

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planning
Plan your text before you write. Make a simple outline with two sides.
structure
Add a short intro to say what you will talk about and a short ending to close.
language
Use clean spelling and good grammar. Check common word mistakes.
content
Give one clear example for each idea to show your point.
content
Try to talk about both sides in the same length.
content
The idea of two views is seen.
structure
The writer uses ordering with 'First' to show steps.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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