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The charts show the age of library members and the proportion of loans by category in 2016, as well as the number of total loans between 2007 and 2016 in Little Chalfont Library

The charts show the age of library members and the proportion of loans by category in 2016, as well as the number of total loans between 2007 and 2016 in Little Chalfont Library
The charts illustrate the
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 of the visitors
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library
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the library
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 and the
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statistics
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 of
loans
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 of the most demanded genres in 2016.
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which
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, which
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 compares
total
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the total
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number
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 of
loans
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 between 2007 and 2016.  
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, most of the customers in the libraries at that
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moment were
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, from the
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age
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ages
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18
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of 18
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 to 64. The most popular categories for
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loans
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 were fiction,
such
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 as
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 and
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adults’
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adult’
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fictions
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fiction
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.
In addition
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, the
overall
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 loan count of books increased slightly over the given period.  
To begin
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 with, nearly half of the patrons were
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from
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the
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of
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18 to 64
,
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 more than 50 individuals
at
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were at
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this
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attended
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.
In contrast
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, the
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 of children who were members of the library was twice smaller
than
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adults
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of adults
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, approximately 22 kids were attendants.
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, young
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 (at the
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 of 13 to 18) and older
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 (older than 65) formed the minority of members, with 15 and 12 members
respectively
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, respectively
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in
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 2016.   The table compares categories, which were borrowed the most in 2016. The
children’s
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 and
adults
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’ fictions were the most in demand, with 38% and 38% respectively.
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, adult non-fiction and
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 non-fiction ranked third and fourth in terms of demand, accounting for 13% and 6% respectively. The least popular categories were young
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 and
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adults
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adult
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 video books, both with 2
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per cent
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 of
loans
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 and
children’s
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 DVDs with 1
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per cent
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.   The bar chart illustrates
comparison
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a comparison
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 of
total
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the total
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number
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 of
loans
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 between 2007 and 2016. In 2007,
total
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the total
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number
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 of
loans
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 was almost 16 thousand and
then
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 grew steadily. In 2011, by reaching more than 21 thousand
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loans
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loans,
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 it started to fall slightly until 2013. By the end of
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the given
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 period, the total
number
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 of
loans
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 had risen to nearly
23 000
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23,000
 in 2016,
although
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 the
overall
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 trend fluctuated throughout the years.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words age, loans, number, adults, children’s with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "illustrate" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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