You recently bought some train tickets for a journey a week in advance. When you went to the station to catch the train, you were told you could not use the tickets and the staff were very unhelpful to you. Write a letter to the train company. In your letter: Describe the problem you had with the tickets Say why were unhappy with the staff Suggest what action the train company should take

Dear Sir or Madam, I hope
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letter finds you well. I am writing to you
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letter in regards to a train
ticket
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purchased for a journey in advance.
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,I bought
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advance
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ticket
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online on 21st August via the official website of LNER.My purchase ID was 2356848.The main problem I had with the
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was that
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I mistakenly selected the wrong time of departure.The time
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reflected on
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ticket
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was an hour later than I was supposed to travel.
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,I got to the train station to get things sorted
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early. On arrival,the place was very busy and crowded.
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is because it was a holiday.
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,many people were
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by train.I was not happy with the
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because none of them made an attempt to help me out.
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I tried to explain the situation to one staff member but she was not willing to help. Unfortunately,I missed my trip and I really need
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compensation for that.I would be glad if I get a full refund or
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compensation not
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than
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80%.
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is because m,the trip I missed was very important and I
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need to be compensated. Thanks for your understanding
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I hope to hear from you soon. Yours Faithfully Esther

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structure
Start with the reason for writing, then give the problem, then say what you want.
coherence
Try to have one main idea in each paragraph.
grammar
Correct grammar and spelling. Errors like 'staffs' and 'every early' break meaning.
tone
Keep a formal and polite tone. Do not push too much; offer a fair request.
lexical
Use simple words and short sentences to be clear.
purpose
Clear aim stated at start.
content
Uses some facts like date and ID.
tone
Formal style in opening and closing.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • disappointed
  • inconvenience
  • frustrated
  • incompetent
  • unhelpful
  • inconsiderate
  • ruined
  • compensation
  • refund
  • apology
  • reimbursement
  • improvement
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