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The table below shows the transport usage for different reasons in UK. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the transport usage for different reasons in UK. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart demonstrates the number of transport types,
such
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 as
car
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, bike, and public transport, and different reasons
of
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for
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 transport usage, including work, shop, social, and other.
Overall
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,
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car
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the car
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 is the most popular
transportation
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,
while
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bike
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the bike
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 takes the smallest part in the UK. First of all, looking
on
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at
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 the purpose
for
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of
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 work,
people
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 usually go to their office by
car
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 or taxi. There are two hundred and one
people
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.
In addition
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, there are five
people
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 who select to
using
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use
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bike
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a bike
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 or motor,
while
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 there are seventeen
people
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 who prefer public
transportation
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.
Then
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, there are one hundred and forty-four
people
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 choosing
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car
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a car
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 for shopping. It is
a
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apply
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quiet
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quite
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 larger than
the
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apply
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public
transportation
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, and it is more than nine times in public
transportation
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.
Moreover
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, it is a similar effect for
people
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 who plan to
socializing
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socialise
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 and other activities. The purpose
for
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of
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 social by public
transportation
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 is
as
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apply
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nine times as
car
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,
whereas
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people
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 who have other purposes by taxi are
near
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nearly
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 six times than public
transportation
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words car, transportation, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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