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The diagram below shows the stages in the recycling of aluminium drinks cans. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the stages in the recycling of aluminium drinks cans. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The illustration demonstrates
that
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apply
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how
the
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apply
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aluminium
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 drinks
cans
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is
Correct subject-verb agreement
are
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 recycled
during
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over
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 six weeks.
Overall
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, there are ten steps in the recycling of
alunimium
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aluminium
cans
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, starting with the
collecting
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collection
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 of waste by truck, followed by the raw material
is
Wrong verb form
being
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 processed and ending with
producing
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the production of
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 new
cans
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.
First,
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a large amount of waste is collected and transported to
deposit
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the deposit
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 machinery by lorries.
After
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this
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 step, the raw material is washed
by
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with
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 water
which
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, which
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 is crushed into small pieces.
Next,
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it is processed to create
aluminium
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 substance in the industrial
manifactory
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manufacturing
. Turning to the
remaning
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remaining
 steps, the
aluminium
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 solid is purified by
chemicals
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chemical
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 liquid.
Then
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, a result of heating, it
become
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becomes
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 a separate liquid which is put into a mould.
Subsequently
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, waiting a short time to mould, it is measured the weight of
aluminium
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, ready
Verb problem
is measured, ready
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 to be sent to
on
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apply
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the next step. It is rolled by
a
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apply
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especial
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special
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 machinery into
long
Punctuation problem
long,
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 thin strips
by
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of
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aluminium
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which
Punctuation problem
, which
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 is assembled
to
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into
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 new
cans
Use synonyms
 to
ultilize
Correct your spelling
utilise
 in daily life.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the first paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words aluminium, cans with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 1 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the first paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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