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The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accomodations in england and wales between 1918 and 2011.

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accomodations in england and wales between 1918 and 2011.
The bar chart gives information about the percentages of mankind
with
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in
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the
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apply
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households and rented
accomodations
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accommodations
 in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.
Overall
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, throughout the
years
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years,
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 the share of
people
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 with their own house saw a rise,
while
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 the proportion of
people
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lived
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living
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 in rented
accomodations
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accommodations
 declined. In 1918, almost 80 % of
people
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 lived in
the
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apply
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rented
accomodations
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accommodations
,
while
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 the shares of
indiviuals
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individuals
 with their own
apartment
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apartments
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 were just over 20%.
Throughtout
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Throughout
 the years, the number of
the
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apply
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owners of houses rose significantly, and by 1971 it marked 50%, just like the share of
people
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lived
Wrong verb form
living
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 in rented flats,
that
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which
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 dropped from 80 % to 50%. In 2001, the
percenatge
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percentage
 of
the
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householders soared to 70%, which was the highest indicator over the years, but a sudden drop by less than 10 % was observed in the next year.
Moreover
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, the shares of non-owners decreased to just over 30%, until
its
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they
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sudden
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suddenly
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 rose by 8% in 2011.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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