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You recently organised an all-day meeting for your company, which took place in a local hotel. In their feedback, participants at the meeting said that they liked the hotel, but they were unhappy about the food that was served for lunch. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter • say what the participants liked about the hotel • explain why they were unhappy about the food • suggest what the manage� should do to improve the food in future

Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to grab your attention on the negative reviews of your
food
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which
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, which
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was
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were
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 given by my company's clients and guests on their
one day
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one-day
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 visit to your hotel. My name is Ketul Shah, the manager of the Starfox
and
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, and
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 I
had
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apply
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organized
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organised
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 a
one day
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one-day
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saminar metting
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seminar meeting
 at your hotel. In their feedback, they seemed satisfied
about
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with
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 the services and facilities they received at your hotel. They
perticularly
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particularly
 mentioned that the
ambient
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 is really welcoming and the music
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as
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, as
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 well as the huge
aquarium
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aquarium,
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 is an eye-catching and
pleasent
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pleasant
 to watch.
However
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, one
perticular
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particular
 thing they seemed disappointed
is with
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with is
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 the midday lunch
food
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. They explained that the main course was
bit
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a bit
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 oily and salty.
In addition
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, the sweet dish was limited
and
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due to
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 which some of my clients had it only once.
Furthermore
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, the bread that was served was cold
too
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, too
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. At
last
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, the
overall
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 experience was amazing and even the
food
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 was delicious too
but
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, but
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,
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apply
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 if you could take steps towards cooking
more
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healthier
food
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 by using less oil, that would be appreciated. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours
Faithfully
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faithfully
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, Ketul Shah

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task response
Start with a clear aim in the first line. Say who you are and what you want from the hotel.
coherence and cohesion
Put one main idea in each paragraph and use easy links like and, but, also, however to show how ideas go together.
content
The letter shows both good notes and bad notes in a calm way.
structure
The end is polite with a clear closing.
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