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Some people prefer to do the same job for a very long time, whereas others prefer to change jobs frequently. Write about the advantages of each viewpoint.

Some people prefer to stay in the same
job
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 for a very long time,
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 others choose to change
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job
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frequantly
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frequently
. Both approaches have their own advantages and disadvantages.
This
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Since
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 many years, a vast majority of society
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 that working at the same
job
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 is
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beneficial
 for people who
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 to become a successful leader in
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field
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 and it is a better way to
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strong
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a strong
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 career for the future. There is no doubt that working regularly
at
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same
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the same
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field
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 can allow workers
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significant opportunities,
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 as learning
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field
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the field
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 completely, meeting leaders
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this
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 way and becoming an expert in
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 work. One of the main
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of
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causing
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to disadvantage
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disadvantaged
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 is staying
at
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in
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 a single occupation
instead
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 of testing new
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opportunities
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 and observing the world
at
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in
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 different places.
On the other hand
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, many people argue that
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 working in
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diverse jobs
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 really significant
during
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life. Because, worker who works at the same company
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lot of time may not
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his
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their
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 main talent and
his
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their
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 greater power.
In other words
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, he might become a better leader in
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field
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 when he tests his opportunity during
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 life.
Therefore
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, many individuals attempt to find
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themselves
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 and
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their
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 lovely
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instead
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 of working for a good salary
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a
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many years, but unless they
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his
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their
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 chances on time, they may stay at the same stage
of
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 the world.
This
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 my standpoint, it does not matter working regular or different place, the most fundamental
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 doing
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 during the life. Because
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 everything has advantages and disadvantages
whatever
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, whatever
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 we choose.

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structure
Plan the steps before you write. Make a short plan with main ideas for each paragraph.
grammar
Use simple grammar. Keep sentences short and clear.
content
Give a real, small example for each view to show how it helps in life.
cohesion
Link ideas with small words like and, but, also, for example.
vocabulary
Check word forms and spelling to avoid small mistakes.
content
The reply talks about both sides, which fits the task.
structure
There is a clear overall idea that a good job matters more than place.
cohesion
Some link words connect ideas well.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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