The table gives information about the percentage of students' attendance in four groups of secondary schools between 2000 and 2009.

The table gives information about the percentage of students' attendance in four groups of secondary schools between 2000 and 2009.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The table gives information about the percentage of students' attendance in four groups of secondary schools between 2000 and 2009.
The table displays statistics about the proportion of pupils' attendance in four different categories of high
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from 2000 to 2009.
Overall
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, specialist
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schools
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, and voluntary-controlled
schools
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decreased gradually over the period, except for voluntary-controlled
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, which dropped significantly.
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community
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schools
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decreased dramatically. In 2000, a higher share of attendance was for voluntary-controlled
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, with just over
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half
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meanwhile, grammar
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' attendance was roughly one quarter.
However
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, specialist and
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schools
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had the same proportion, with a small minority. By 2005, voluntary-controlled
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still had the highest pupils, with nearly 38%, overtaking the others.
Community
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had more students than any other school in 2009, with just over 58%. Specialist
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remained relatively stable;
by contrast
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community
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schools
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reached the top, with over half.
While
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voluntary-controlled
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witnessed a rapid fall over the period, with around 20%, and grammar
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experienced a slight decline in the entire period, with just 10%, in 2009.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words schools, community with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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