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The table shows the population ratio of females per 100 males in six different areas (Africa, Asia, Europe, North America, Central America, and Oceania) in 1995 and 2005. Summarize and report key features.

The table shows the population ratio of females per 100 males in six different areas (Africa, Asia, Europe, North America, Central America, and Oceania) in 1995 and 2005. Summarize and report key features.
The given diagram illustrates the
population
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ratio
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 of women per 100 men in
Africa
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,
Asia
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, Europe, North
America
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, Central
America
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,
Oceania
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and Oceania
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 in 1995 and 2005. It can be seen that the
ratio
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 of the female
population
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 per 100 male
population
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 in different regions during
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 time has different trends. The
population
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ratio
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 of females per 100 males in
Asia
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 for the highest.
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, in Europe, the rate for women was lower than that for men in 1995 and in
Africa
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, the figure was lowest in 2005. Regarding these figures in
Asia
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, North
America
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, Central
America
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,
Oceania
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and Oceania
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 in 1995 and
2005
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2005,
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 all had decreasing figures. In
Asia
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, it declined slowly from 105,3 to 104,9. Looking at the data, in the 3 remaining areas, the decrease was from 2.5 (1995) to about 4.1(2005). In terms of the percentage of girls citizens in
Africa
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 and Europe, there is an
increased
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 trend. The
ratio
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 of female
population
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 per 100 male
population
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 in
Africa
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 rose from 97.8 in 1995 to 99.2 in 2005. During
this
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 period, there was a slight climb in the female
population
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 between 89,4 and 92,8.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, ratio, africa, asia, america with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "ratio" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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