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The line graph below shows the consumption of 3 different types of fast food in Britain from 1970 to 1990.

The line graph below shows the consumption of 3 different types of fast food in Britain from 1970 to 1990.
The line graph illustrates
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the
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number
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 of consumptions in three different fast food includes
hamburger
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hamburgers
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,
fish&chips
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fish & chips,
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 and pizza
in
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, in
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the
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Britain from 1970 to 1990.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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the consumptions
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consumptions
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consumption
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number
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apply
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of
the
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apply
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hamburger
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hamburgers
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 and fish&chips showed a steady but they faced
significant
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a significant
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 increase over time,
while
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 pizza experienced a downward trend. At the beginning of
period
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the period
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,
hamburger
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hamburgers
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 stood at 20 in 1970. It rose slightly
nearly
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to nearly
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 half
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number
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the number
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 which began with.
However
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, in 1980 the
number
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 of
consumption
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consumers
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leveled
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levelled
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 off for five years;
subsequently
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 it went up sharply, reaching
at
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299 people.
In contrast
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, fish&chips recorded 89 in 1970 and it
repaid
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rose until
1980
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1980,
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 after
that
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which that
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reaching
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reached
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 the highest
number
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 of consumption in
the
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apply
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Britain.
On the other hand
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, pizza started at 300 in 1970
which
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, which
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 was the most popular meal. It fell slowly in the following 15 years
reaching
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, reaching
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 210 in 1980. In
1985
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1985,
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 it remained
constant
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approximately 200 over the period.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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