More people will work from home and more student will study at home if computer technology becomes cheap and accessible. What will be the advantage and disadvantage if this happen?

More and more people are going to
work
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and study at
their
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apply
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home
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only if computer technology becomes much cheaper and
easy
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easier
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to
get
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access
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. The main feature of being at
home
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while
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studying and working is that
streets
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the streets
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won't be crowded anymore.
Due to
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work
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times, roads become more
corweded
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crowded
by people and cars,
that
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which
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lead
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leads
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us
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to many accidents and lost lives, so staying at
home
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would be better for your own good and for humans.
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, Saudi Arabia during Covid-19 is the prime example for
this
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,
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;
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statistics show the proportions of accidents have declined dramatically,with over 23%, because all schools and
work
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were at
home
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by
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via
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Zoom. Despite
this
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community benefit,
human
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the human
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body would be in
a
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apply
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serious danger and not healthy at all. Being at
home
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for 24 hours would probably kill you slowly
,
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in addition
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, you are exposing yourself
for
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to
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dangerous problems
such
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as
,
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apply
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obesity, diabetes, and cardiac diseases. To illustrate,
My
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my
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father
always
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is always
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at
home
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, doesn't go to
work
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, and stays 24h in
fornt
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front
of
computer
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the computer
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to do his
work
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, and one day, he went to a
docter
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doctor
, and he was diagnosed with type 1 diabetes. So we have to go out and do our daily
excercies
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exercises
regularly, even if we have
computer
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a computer
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. In conclusion, it doesn't mean
if
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that if
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we have the ability
of buying
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to buy
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technology devices,
that
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apply
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we
be
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have to be
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at
home
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for many hours
,
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;
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there are a lot of things you can do, in order to be
more
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apply
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healthier. Even if it stops crowding, we must do the right thing
,
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apply
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by going out and
move
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moving
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your
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our
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muscles.

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