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The first table below shows changes in the total population of New York City from 1800 to 2000. The second and third tables show changes in the population of the five districts of the city (Manhattan, Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens, Staten Island) over the same period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The first table below shows changes in the total population of New York City from 1800 to 2000. The second and third tables show changes in the population of the five districts of the city (Manhattan, Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens, Staten Island) over the same period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The first table shows that how many
populations
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population
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 there were in New
York
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City
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,
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apply
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 from 1800 to 2000. The second and third tables
indicates
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indicate
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 changes in the
population
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 of the five districts of the
city
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 ,including Manhattan, Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens,
Staten
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and Staten
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 Island. In general,
it is clear that
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 the numbers of
population
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 in New
York
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City
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 is increasing between 1800 and 2000,
while
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 the
population
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 has decreased in
Mahattan
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Manhattan
among
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between
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 1900 to 2000. Manhattan's
population
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 has increased since 1800
,
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;
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however
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, the
precentage
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percentage
 of
total
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the total
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population
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 is decreasing over a period of time. In
the
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apply
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contrast,
Other
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the Other
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 five districts'
percentge
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percentage
 of
total
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the total
show examples
population
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, including Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens
or
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and
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 Staten Island, has increased. The
popultion
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population
 of Manhattan
hold
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held
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 the largest
population
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 of
the
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apply
show examples
New
York
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City
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,
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apply
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 till 2000,
other
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when other
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 districts took over
it
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apply
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. The
population
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 of
five
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the five
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district
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districts
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 of
the
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apply
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New
York
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City
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 dramatically increased from 1900 to 2000.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words york, city, population with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • people
  • city
  • five
  • district
  • grow
  • growth
  • rise
  • increase
  • increase
  • rise
  • fall
  • decline
  • high
  • low
  • big
  • large
  • small
  • more
  • less
  • over time
  • by year
  • in total
  • compare
  • compared with
  • whereas
  • trend
  • pattern
  • overall
  • feature
  • note
  • point
  • difference
  • lead
  • catch up
  • late
  • early
  • century
  • decade
  • period
  • 2000
  • 1800
  • 1900
  • continuous
  • steady
  • rapid
  • fast
  • slow
  • periods
  • numbers
  • data
  • report
  • describe
  • summarise
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