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In many countries nowadays, consumers can go to a supermarket and buy food produced all over the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

In many countries nowadays, consumers can go to a supermarket and buy
food
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 produced all over the world. In our contemporary world, numerous people purchase
food
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 goods from other countries in supermarkets. In
this
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overperform
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outweigh
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 its drawbacks. First and foremost, people should
recognize
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recognise
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 that there are many
advantages
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of
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to
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 going to a supermarket. A very crucial point to consider is that
have
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we have
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 a variety of choices in
food
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.
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mean
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means
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 that individuals, especially in the rural areas, can access
to
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the previously
unvailable
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unavailable
 products.
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 approach
make
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makes
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enrich
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enriching
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 culinary experiences for the residents and
can
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allows them to
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 enjoy the taste and ingredients
that do not have
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without having
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 to visit
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particularly
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particular
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 country. Another
the
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factor
that
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is increase
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increases
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 the economy of
country
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a country
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. The government of
import
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the importing
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 country can boost
the
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its
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 overcome
through
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by
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rise
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raising
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 the tax
of
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on
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 foreign trade goods.
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,
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 to the important
advantages
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 of
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problem
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problem,
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 it has some detriment for the environment and the security of
food
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 crops.
First,
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the transporting
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transporting
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transportation
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 of international products by air or seafaring vessels.
This
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 action can release a significant amount of greenhouse gas emissions, contributing to climate change.
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, if the residents
over depends
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overdepend
 on the external sources,
which
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it
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 can
effect
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affect
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on
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apply
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the domestic suppliers. To illustrate
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point
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point,
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i
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I
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 would like
mention
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to mention
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 that
,
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apply
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 the
debation
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debate
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 between Ukraine and Russia causes a drawbacks
effects
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effect
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 on wheat exports in Ukraine. In conclusion, the
above mentioned
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above-mentioned
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 facts have outlined
thr
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the
 benefits
as well as
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 drawbacks of going to a supermarket and
consumpting
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consuming
food
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 products. Its
advantages
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 should be taken into account. People should take
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advantages
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advantage
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 of the pros and
minimize
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minimise
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 the cons of
this
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 issue.

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structure
Plan your essay before you write. Start with a short view on the topic, then give 2 or 3 big ideas with steps.
coherence
Make each paragraph talk about one idea. Use a fast link word to join ideas, like 'also', 'but', 'however', 'for example'.
grammar
Check errors in grammar and word use. Use small, clear phrases.
task response
Be sure to clearly say your view in the last sentence of the intro and the last paragraph.
content
Use real facts or clear examples. If you use an example, explain how it shows the point.
content
The essay tries to discuss both sides of the issue.
structure
There is a beginning, a middle, and an end plan.
coherence
Some linking words and clear try to show contrast.

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • nutrition
  • cultural exposure
  • competitive markets
  • economic boost
  • employment opportunities
  • carbon footprint
  • environmental impact
  • local produce
  • food security
  • global supply chain
  • sustainable practices
  • consumer choice
  • market dynamics
  • price competition
  • agricultural sector
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