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the chart below gives information about Southland's main exports in 2000, *20.., and future production for 2025

the chart below gives information about Southland's main exports in 2000, *20.., and future production for 2025
The data illustrates
about
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Southland's major
expots
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exports
 in 2000,2010
and
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, and
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 future production for 2025.
Overall
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, in 2000, international
toursim
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tourism
 reached its highest peak in 2025, which is nearly
touch
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10
10billion
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10billion,
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whereas
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,
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 Meat products went down from 2000 to 2025, and
shows
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showed
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highest
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the highest
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fell down
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decline
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. After analysing the graph, it can be seen that , in
2000
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2000,
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 the international tourism constantly increased
fron
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from
 8
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billions
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billion
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 to almost 10
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billions
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billion
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 between 2000 to 2025.
Although
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,
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apply
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On
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on
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 the one hand, Dairy
products
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product
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 projection values
touch
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reached
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 7
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billions
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billion
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 in 2000, apart from
that
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that,
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its
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it
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 showed
high
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a high
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peaked
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peak
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 in 2010
,
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.
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On the other hand
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, in 2025, it
slighlty
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slightly
 fluctuated from 10
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billions
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billion
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 to two-thirds of
value
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the value
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 from 2010.
However
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, Meats projects shares 6
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billions
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billion
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 project rates in 2000,
therefore
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, it
keep
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kept
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 on decreasing in 2010 from 6 to 5.6
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billions
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billion
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. Significantly, in 2025, the
overall
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 production rate goes down
fom
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from
 6 to 5
which
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, which
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share
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shares
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 a least area of exportism, in comparison with other factors.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words billions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went down" was used 2 times.
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