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Band 3

Many people today are worried about cybercrime, chess hacking and identity theft. What problems does cybercrime cause, and what solutions can you suggest for ordinary people and businesses to take?

Cybercrime
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 can be a threat to many people,
while
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 some are already aware of
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cybercrime
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cybercrime,
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 there
are
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is
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also
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 a concerning amount of citizens who have yet to understand the potential danger of
cybercrime
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.
This
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 essay will discuss the problems of
cybercrime
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 and the possible solutions to prevent or stop
cybercrime
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 from happening. To address
this
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 situation,
cybercrime
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 is a type of theft
that is
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 caused by the use of the internet to steal
information
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 from users who
were
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have been
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 hacked
,
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. This
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this
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 can lead to identity theft and
information
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 loss.
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, the hacker can sell
this
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information
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in
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on
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 the black market or impersonate the person
whom
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from whom
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 they stole the
information
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from
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apply
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. The duration of the hacking process could be quick and hard to notice
so
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, so
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 the owner of the
information
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 would not have enough time to protect it. Though
,
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 users can install antivirus software to prevent
this
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 from happening, antivirus software has the ability to detect and identify
information
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 that has been installed via the internet
, now
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. Now
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 the users will be able to protect and secure their
information
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 from an unknown source that might be threatening to the user's data. In conclusion,
cybercrime
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 can pose
danger
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a danger
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 to
the
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people
but
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, but
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 preventing
cybercrime
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 from occurring is possible
due to
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 the support of today’s antivirus software or
application
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applications
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.

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task response
Add more detail on the problems that cybercrime causes and how it hurts people and firms.
coherence
Put ideas in clear blocks: one on problems, one on solutions for people, and one for business.
cohesion
Use simple linking words to show flow: first, also, then, finally.
lexis
Choose exact, not repeat, words and give small, real examples like fake emails or lost money.
grammar
Check grammar and sentence form; keep tenses and subject-verb agreement correct.
strength
The essay has a clear topic about cybercrime and its harm.
structure
There is an introduction and a short conclusion.
language
The language is simple and easy to read.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cybercrime
  • identity theft
  • hacking
  • business
  • trust
  • internet
  • financial loss
  • protection
  • victim
  • emotional stress
  • data
  • reputation
  • legal issues
  • solutions
  • ordinary people
  • customers
  • banking
  • online services
  • shopping
  • safety
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