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Access to clean water is a basic human right. Therefore, every home should have a water supply that is provided free of charge. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

It is often argued that accessing clean
water
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 is a basic human right, and every household should be provided with a
water
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 supply without
charge
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. In my opinion,
although
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 I agree with
this
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 view, I believe that it should be paid less
instead
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 of being free of
charge
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.
Firstly
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, one major reason why I am holding
this
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 view is that clean
water
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 is essential to human beings.
This
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 is because people need to use
water
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 as part of their lives, and without it, they can not be alive. Many households depend on
water
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 to meet their basic needs.
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, people need to drink clean
water
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 every day and use it for cooking and other necessary needs.
Secondly
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, clean
water
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 is directly linked to the public's health because unpurified
water
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 can cause many diseases,
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 as dengue fever.
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, getting access to clean
water
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 without
charge
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 prevents humans from illness caused by unclean
water
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.
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, providing
water
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 without
charge
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 leads to a negative impact on the
government
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.
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 means that the
government
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 should
charge
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 a smaller amount for supplying
water
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 to households to maintain the supply system.
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, when an environmental disaster occurs, the
government
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 needs the budget to maintain the
water
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 provision system so that everyone can access
water
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 smoothly.
Thus
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, every household should pay a smaller amount of the
charge
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instead
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 of being free of
charge
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.
To conclude
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, I believe that
water
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 is vital for everyone
,
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 and should be given free access to humans to be healthy and convenient in their daily lives.
Nevertheless
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, I think people should be charged a small amount so that the
government
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 can retain the system smoothly, even if unexpected problems occur.

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task response
Be clear in your view at the start and keep it the same all through.
task response
Put one main idea in each paragraph and add a real example that fits.
task response
Explain your ideas with more detail about why water should not be free and how this helps people.
coherence
Make a simple plan for your essay: intro, 2–3 points, then a short conclusion.
coherence
Use linking words to show how ideas fit together and to move from one point to the next.
content
The essay shows work to answer the question.
structure
There is a plan with clear paragraphs.
language
Some link words are used, which helps flow.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • basic
  • human
  • right
  • water
  • supply
  • provided
  • free
  • charge
  • agree
  • disagree
  • health
  • essential
  • sick
  • diseases
  • supports
  • education
  • children
  • focus
  • learning
  • searching
  • better
  • futures
  • reduce
  • poverty
  • families
  • save
  • money
  • spend
  • important
  • needs
  • promote
  • equality
  • chance
  • access
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