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The bar chart below shows transport preferences among young people in four countries in a single year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows transport preferences among young people in four countries in a single year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar graph provided the information on the proportion of
transport
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preferences
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 among young
people
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 in four
countries
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 in a single year.
Overall
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 is noticeable that cars were the
transport
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 which had the highest
percentage
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 of
transport
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preferences
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 among young
people
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 in most
countries
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. The lowest
percentage
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 of
transport
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preferences
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 among young
people
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 was
motorcycles
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for motorcycles
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 in most
countries
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. The rate of Cars was over 60%, which was more than twice more than the
second highest
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percentage
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 of
transport
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.in most
countries
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In contrast
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 to other
countries
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, in France, the highest
percentage
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 of
transport
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preferences
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 among young
people
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 stood at around 46%, which
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at
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 Bicycles. The rate of motorcycles was lower at 15% in most
countries
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.
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countries
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, in the United States, 20% of young
people
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 prefer motorcycles, and 10% of young
people
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 prefer bicycles.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in contrast".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words transport, preferences, people, countries, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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