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Schools should not force children to learn a foreign language, because some students don’t have a natural ability for languages. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? (08.06.25)

Whether learning a foreign
language
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 should be compulsory or not
have
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has
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 been debated many times. Some people said it should be
but
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, but
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 others reason that some students don’t have the
ability
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 to learn
languages
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. There are some reasons behind
this
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 debate
and
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, and
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this
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 essay will discuss the reasons and propose some solutions to address
it
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them
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.
Firstly
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, the “natural
ability
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 for
languages
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” definition is the same around the world. It’s considered
as
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apply
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the
ability
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for reading
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to read
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,
speaking
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speak
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,
writing
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write
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 and
listening
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listen
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of
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to
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 a random
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languages
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language
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.
This
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ability
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 brought us some benefits that we cannot achieve without it.
For instance
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, it will enable the
ability
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 to communicate naturally with
the
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apply
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foreigners, making it more convenient for both to understand
eachother
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each other
.
In addition
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, it will
grant
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give
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 you
more
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a better
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 chance
to be
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of being
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 accepted at those
foreigner
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foreign
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 companies since they use mostly the overseas
language
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.
For example
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, some companies require an
ielts
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IELTS
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 certificate of 6.5+ mark,
this
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 is to make sure the employees can cooperate with others effectively. Even though there are some benefits, drawbacks are
also
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 there. Learning new
languages
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 is not easy, especially for those with disability. Obviously, those students
that
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who
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 were deaf could not learn
listening
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to listen
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,
or
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and
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 those
were
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who were
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 muted could not learn how to talk.
Moreover
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, it is costly to learn a
language
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 thoroughly, so
familys
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families
 with poor
condition
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conditions
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 might not afford the cost of the
language
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 sessions. Not only that, some
familys
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families
at
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in
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 remote
area
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areas
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 don’t even have the internet
due to
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 poor
areas
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apply
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condition
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conditions
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, making it nearly impossible to learn anything online. In summary, learning foreign
languages
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 brought more opportunities to work at a foreign business and
gains
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gained
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 the
ability
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 to communicate fluently with
the
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international
.
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people.
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However
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, there are some disadvantages for those experiencing disability,
such
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 as hearing impairment,
unable
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being unable
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 to speak or
those
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apply
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having poor conditions. I totally agree that
foreigns
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foreign
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language
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languages
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 should not be mandatory,
instead
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 encouraging students to learn
it
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them
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.

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task response
Be clear in your main idea in the first paragraph and stay on one plan. Say why you think it should not be a must, with 2 or 3 simple reasons.
coherence
Use clear paragraphing. Have one main idea in each body paragraph and start with a short sentence that shows the point.
coherence
Link ideas with simple words like and, but, also, however to help flow.
intro/conclusion
End with a short conclusion that restates your view.
examples
Give examples that fit the point. Talk about cost, lack of access, or fairness when useful.
language
Check spelling and grammar. Use simple, clear sentences.
strength
The writer shows a clear view against making language study must.
strength
Some points about costs and access are shown.
strength
The essay uses some linking words to join ideas.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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