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Some people believe that universities should offer places to young students with high marks. Other believe that people of all ages and with low grades should be allowed to study. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some would say that places at higher educational institutions should be made available to
students
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 with high
marks
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,
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 others believe that
individuals
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 of all ages and
marks
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 should be granted the
opportunity
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 to study.
Although
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students
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 with
highest
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the highest
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 achievements are more intended to succeed in their studies, I believe that all
individuals
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 should have an
opportunity
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 to receive
education
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.
That is
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obvsious
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obvious
 that
students
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 with high
marks
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 are more ambitious and
intented
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intent
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on continuing
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 their
education
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.
As well as
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 having high
marks
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 means they have a quite good background that will enable
to
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them to
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 succeed in
futher
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further
 academic path. Not everyone
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 an
opportunity
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 at
early
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an early
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ages
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age
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 to maintain good
marks
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 -
individuals
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 with disadvantaged backgrounds did not have an
opportunity
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 to receive proper early
education
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. I believe people should be given
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 chance to try again, they should be allowed to study
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 only hardworking, intelligent ones should receive their diplomas. In conclusion, even if
students
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 with
highest
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the highest
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 achievements are more intended to succeed in their studies, I believe that all
individuals
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 should be given equal rights to receive
education
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 and only
succesful
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successful
students
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 should receive their diplomas.

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task
Your ideas are there, but they are not shown in a clear way. State one main idea for each side and give one small example. End with your clear view.
structure
Use a simple plan: intro, two body paragraphs, and a short conclusion. Each part has one idea.
coherence
Link ideas with plain words like first, also, but, however, in addition, then, so to keep flow.
grammar
Check spelling and grammar. Common mistakes: obvious, intended, further, have/has. Read your essay aloud to hear errors.
lexical
Choose simple words. Stay with common words from the top 100. Avoid big words that you would not spell well.
content
The essay asks about the topic and shows a view.
form
There is a clear plan with an intro, body, and conclusion.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • academic excellence
  • competitive environment
  • high achievers
  • inclusive education
  • diverse perspectives
  • equal opportunities
  • innovative ideas
  • personal development
  • societal growth
  • strict criterion
  • well-rounded education
  • motivates younger generations
  • learning experience
  • academic performance
  • right to higher education
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