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Writing Samples
Band 4

some people think that the government sould spend more money on puplic service rather than wasthing money on the aets . to what extend do you agree

Society is very different
todat
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today
especially
Punctuation problem
, especially
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 after the public
service
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. The
government
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 should
to
Verb problem
apply
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spend more money on public
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service
Fix the agreement mistake
services
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.
the
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The
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 human
think
Correct subject-verb agreement
thinks
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 the
government
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wasting
Verb problem
is wasting
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mmoney
Correct your spelling
money
 on the arts. The
eassy
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essay
 will examine
mo
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my
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 opinion about public
service
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 if
i
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I
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 agree or disagree . On the one hand,
i
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I
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 will talk in
this
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 body about
the
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apply
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why
i
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I
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 agree
the
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with the
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 public
service
Use synonyms
 . The.
public
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Public
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service
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 is very
essantial
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essential
 in
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people
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people's
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life
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lives
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.
First,
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the
puplic
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public
service
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 made
the
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apply
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society life better, and
also
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healther
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healthier
.
Secondlly
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Secondly
, the human can visit any
place
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in
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at
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good
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a good
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 price ,
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Also
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also
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 without
appointment
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an appointment
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 . Health care
service
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one
Verb problem
is one
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 of the most important
on
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apply
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puplic servise
Correct your spelling
public services
.
In addition
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 , the open
servise
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service
 same ,
Garden
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gardens
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,
museume
Correct your spelling
museums
, outdoor activities , ground plays , making
people
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happynies
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happy
.
Finally
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, most visitors more
tha
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than
. 50
persent
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per cent
 of the real price .
On the other hand
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 , I will talk in
this
Linking Words
 body why
some times
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sometimes
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i
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I
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 disagree
the
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with the
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 public
service
Use synonyms
 .
First,
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some
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place
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places
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 in
kuwait
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Kuwait
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 country having i long
line
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lines
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 and
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also
Verb problem
are also
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 very
crowding
Correct word choice
crowded
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, on
Punctuation problem
. On
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the
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apply
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top of
this
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 information ,
the
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apply
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people
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cant
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can't
 book
a
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an
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 appointment for the activities.
However
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 ,
some
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in some
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 places
the
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, the
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 worker
didnt
Correct your spelling
didn't
 clean the public
place
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 or the
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people visit
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place people visit
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place
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 .
Thirdly
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,
If
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if
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 the
place
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its not
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isn't
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clean
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cleaned
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 carefully leads to
alot
Correct your spelling
a lot
 of germs .
In addition
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 , the
people
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 will
safe
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save
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 money but the
government
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 will
loss
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lose
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 money and will
had
Wrong verb form
have
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 less cash .
Finally
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 , I agree with the public
service
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 to
made
Wrong verb form
make
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 the society better and connected . In
conclution
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conclusion
, I
advice
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advise
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 the
government
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made
Verb problem
to make
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 rules to reduce the
crawding
Correct your spelling
crowding
 in the popular places
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also
Punctuation problem
, also
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making
Wrong verb form
make
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website
Correct article usage
a website
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 to book
appointment
Correct article usage
an appointment
show examples
 . I
advice
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advise
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 the
govenment
Correct your spelling
government
 to
increasing
Wrong verb form
increase
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 the time of the activities .

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structure
Plan your essay before you write. Make a short plan with your view, then two clear parts.
task
Be clear about your view in the first paragraph and again in the end.
cohesion
Use simple link words to join ideas. Examples: and, but, also, so, then.
content
Give one good reason for each idea and a small example.
grammar
Check spell and word form. Fix wrong spellings and big errors.
content
You try to talk about both sides and give a view.
structure
You use 'on the one hand' and 'on the other hand' to show two sides.
coherence
You try to link main ideas with some joining words.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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