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THE BAR CHART SHOWS THE AMOUNT OF TEA AND COFFEE IMPORTED BY FOUR DIFFERENT COUNTRIES IN TONNES

THE BAR CHART SHOWS THE AMOUNT OF TEA AND COFFEE IMPORTED BY FOUR DIFFERENT COUNTRIES IN TONNES
The bar charts
illustrates
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 the total amount of
tea
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 and
coffee
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 imported by Canada, the US, the
UK
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, and
Germany
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.
Overall
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,
tea
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 is the most valuable
comodity
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commodity
 in the
UK
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, rather than three other countries. Meanwhile, the highest demand
of
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for
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coffee
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 was shown in
Germany
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.
To begin
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 with, the
UK
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 claim the highest demand
of
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for
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tea
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 by 80,000
tonnes
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.
Although
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 the
UK
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 and
Germany
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 at the same
continet
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continent
, the
rconsumption
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consumption
 of
tea
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 in
Germany
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only
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is only
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a
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apply
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half
than
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that
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the
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of the
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UK
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. On the other hand,
Canadian
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Canada
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 and American have the least imported
tea
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 by 20,000
tonnes
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.
Coffee
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 is popular among
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Germany
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German
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 people
,
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;
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 the consumption is 50,000
tonnes
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 among the public.
Thus
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,
American
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Americans
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 and
Canadian
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Canadians
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 consume approximately 40,000
tonnes
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,
while
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 the British people only consume 30,000
tonnes
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coffee
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of coffee
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bean
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beans
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.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tea, coffee, uk, germany, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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