More and more company are allowing employees to work at home/allowing student to study at home. Do you think is a positive or negative development?

In some
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employees are allowed to work from
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and
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students are attending
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class
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classes
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from their
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. In
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essay will discuss the reasons for
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trend and
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largely a negative development. In my
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opinion,
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studying from
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can have several drawbacks. It often
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decreases
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skills and
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to feel lazyness for most students as they attend class from
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.
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, it can affect life in the outside world, as
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classes from
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decrease
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the
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body movement.
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it can affect the
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phyiscal
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physical
health. The disadvantage
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working at
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is
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can cause less creativity and productivity, as employees can get very comfortable.
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some
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disturbance
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in
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with a big family in it can cause distraction
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working.
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, there are very few benefits to working from
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. The only exception is when companies face an urgent matter and require
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online meeting to
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resolve
the issue, which can be a temporary overtime.
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exception to help finish important projects with
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deadline can be one of the few advantages.
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,
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should remain an occasional measure rather than a permanent practice. As for
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studying from
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home
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the only exception
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my point of view is that taking
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focused
course to help improve
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weakness
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a particular subject. In conclusion,
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working or studying from
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may sometimes be
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necessary
, I strongly believe that
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trend is harmful
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. It reduces productivity, damages health, and negatively affects people's lives outside of work.

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structure
Make a clear plan before writing: intro with your stance, then 2-3 body paragraphs each with a main idea and a simple example, and a short conclusion restating your view.
language
Fix the spelling and grammar: check common errors like decresases, lazyness, phyiscal. Use correct verb forms and simple grammar.
coherence
Improve links between ideas: use easy joining words like 'but', 'and', 'also', 'therefore', 'however' to guide the reader.
content
Add more clear examples: give one or two specific, easy examples to back each point.
task
Keep to the topic and be sure your view is clear from start to end, with a strong final sentence.
content
The essay shows a clear view that home work may be negative.
language
It uses simple words and tries to explain the idea of health and life outside work.
content
There is an effort to argue both sides and to end with a view.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • disparity
  • resources
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