Studies show that crime rates are lower among those with educational degrees. Therefore, the best way to reuce the crime rate is to educate criminals while they are still in prison. To what extend do you agree or disagree?
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Be clear. Say your view in one line at the start. Then give two reasons.
Make a plan with an intro, two body parts, and a short end.
Use one idea in each paragraph and use topic sentences.
Link ideas with clear 'first', 'also', 'but', 'so' words.
Check grammar. Use short, safe lines. Avoid long, mixed sentences.
The idea of crime and education is seen.
The topic is real and can matter to readers.
Include an introduction and conclusion
A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.
The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.
The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:
- Summary
- Restatement of thesis
- Prediction or recommendation
Example:
To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.
Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:
- In conclusion
- To conclude
- To summarize
- Finally
- In a nutshell
- In general