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nowdays, more teenagers want to become famous actors or singers. why do you think this is happening? is this a positive or negative development?

In the contemporary world, the film and drama industries have attracted numerous teenagers to pursue their careers in acting or singing
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. In my opinion,
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 trend is increasing because, nowadays,
youth
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 presume that these
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 have more
reputation
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. I believe that
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 concern has both positive and negative developments. I think the significant reason for
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 happening in
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 is to gain social media popularity. In the modern era, youngsters are using various social media platforms
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 as Facebook, WhatsApp, TikTok and Netflix. By watching their famous actors or listening
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 favourite singers on these channels, they believe it is easy to earn money without any qualification or hard work.
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, they pursue
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 careers. On the one hand, youngsters are negatively impacted by
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 trend. Because they think that
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 of completing a master's degree or doing a job, it is better to
do acting
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 or
singing
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 and become famous.
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,
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 led them not to complete their university studies.
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, actors and singers are inspiring
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 to find their desired
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.
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, a famous singer, in the Tongo named Ali did started his career in the singing field
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doctoral degree. Now, he is a popular singer and has become a famous motivational speaker, who urges
youth
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 to work hard on their desired goals. In conclusion, both acting and singing professions are becoming common, currently, because these
fields
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 do not require any qualifications.
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, I think
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 concern is minimising the number of young graduates in society.
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, teenagers who are less interested in studies have found their
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field.

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coherence
Keep one main idea in each paragraph. Use easy linking words like first, next, also, but, and finally to show how ideas are tied.
grammar
Use simple and clear grammar. Check common mistakes like wrong verb forms or questions without marks.
content
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task
Try to say your view clearly in the end. A short final line restates your view.
structure
The essay starts with a clear topic and a view is shown in the end.
ideas
It sees both sides: good and bad parts are shown.
content
There is an effort to give an example of a public figure.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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