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The bar chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in Australia, divided into three categories, from 2001- 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in Australia, divided into three categories, from 2001- 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart represents the number of
minutes
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 of telephone calls in Australia, between 2001 and 2008, categorised into three types of calls: local, national and international, and mobile calls.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the highest
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 were spent on Local calls,
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 the number of mobile call
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 grew steadily throughout the years, and national and international calls increased slightly.
To begin
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 with, spending billions of
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 on Local calls started at just 72
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minutes
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 in 2001.
Then
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this
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 figure rose steadily to reach a peak of 90
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 in 2005, before falling slightly to 72 in the final year.
On the other hand
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, national and international calls experienced a gradual increase from about 38
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minutes
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 in 2001 to around 72
billion
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minutes
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 by 2008. The most notable trend,
however
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, was in mobile phone calls, which started with a modest figure of around 2
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minutes
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 in 2001, but surged significantly over the years, reaching approximately 46
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minutes
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 by 2008.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words minutes, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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