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The Graphs below show four categories of citrus fruits and the top three countries to which thee were exported in thousand tonnes in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The Graphs below show four categories of citrus fruits and the top three countries to which thee were exported in thousand tonnes in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
The four bar charts illustrate the quantity of citrus fruits exported by the top three countries in the year 2010, measured in
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Overall
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, the Oranges were the most heavily exported citrus fruit, with the country of South Africa leading in
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 category.
In contrast
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, the grapefruit exports had the lowest among the four countries.
While
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 Turkey and Mexico dominated lemon and other citrus fruit exports , respectively, the United
States
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 consistently appeared among the top exporters across multiple categories. In terms of orange exports, South Africa recorded the highest figure at just over 1 million
tonnes
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, followed by Egypt at around 900
thousand
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tonnes
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 the United
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 exported slightly less than 700
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tonnes
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. Regarding lemons, Turkey leads with 500
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tonnes
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, surpassing Mexico by about 100
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tonnes
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, Argentina transported just over 200
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, significantly lower than the other two nations. From the second category, the Grapefruit was considerably smaller in scale. The United
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 and South Africa exported similar amounts, both at around 230
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tonnes
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whereas
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 Turkey exported roughly 200
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tonnes
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. As for other citrus fruits, Mexico was the largest exporter by far, at around 400
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tonnes
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, which was more than double the amount exported by Israel , approximately 100
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tonnes
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 and more than five times that of the United
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 , just under 100
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tonnes
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words thousand, tonnes, states with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amounts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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