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Writing Samples
Band 5

You travel by bus every weekday, and you always use the same bus route. Recently the bus has not been reliable. You have also noticed that bus is dirtier than it used to be. Write a letter to the manager of bus company. In your letter - introduce yourself and explain why you are writing - explain the situation - suggest what should be done to improve the service.

Dear Sir or Madam, I am a
satifised
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satisfied
 passenger of your 8A
bus
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 route
which
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, which
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run
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runs
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in
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between
two
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the two
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 ends of Barrie . As a daily commuter of your travel
route
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route,
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 I am concerned in
term
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terms
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 of reliability and the
cleanniness
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cleanliness
 of the transport. There
has
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have
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 been many
dissatisfing
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dissatisfying
experience
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experiences
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 with my travel
when
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apply
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in
term
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terms
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 of
bus
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timming
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timing
. Either
it
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apply
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is
bus
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 route is detoured or it will
be always
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always be
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 late
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due
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, due
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 to that I was late for my work and important meetings.
Moreover
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, the sanitation of the
bus
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 is below
the
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apply
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par. Even early in the
morning
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morning,
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 the passenger seat
are
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is
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 not cleaned and the garbage is
changed
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not changed
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. I
tired
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tried
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 explaining the concern to one of the
employee's
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employees
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 working in the terminal, yet they did not
paided
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pay
 attention to my
heed
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head
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. I would appreciate
if
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it if
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signifiacant
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significant
 steps are taken to resolve
this
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 issue. The
bus
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 should not only
get
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be
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 inspected every morning by the management
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,
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but
also
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 should run on time to avoid any bitter customer service experience. I would appreciate you
look
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 into
this
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 matter urgently. Kind regards, Harsimran kaur

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Structure
Put one idea in one paragraph. Start with who you are, then the problem, then what you want changed.
Language
Use simple words. Fix spell and grammar.
Content
Be clear on what you ask and be polite.
Structure
Greeting and closing are good.
Content
The letter says what is wrong and what you want.
Tone
The tone is calm and polite.
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