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Robots and artificial intelligent are being developed to replace human in the workplace. Why is this happening? Do you think this will have a positive or negative effect

In our new era, it has been
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 that robots and is getting promoted to take
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 place in occupations. Some people
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 it is getting dangerous for human's future occupation.
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 my opinion regarding
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 topic. On the one hand,
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 technology has brought so
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 welfare for human
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on
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 all aspects of life, but again there
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is
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 made up of artificial
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.
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, it has made life easier for people in
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 busy lifetime
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 as everything is connected to the internet and AI
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 in a second you can access
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data
 about everything.
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, thanks to AI, nowadays, nothing is
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impossible
 to
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achieve
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 need an effort and
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 remote jobs
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mad
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made
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easier things
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things easier
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 for women
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, specially
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specially
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, they can go to work but still can

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structure
Plan your essay. Write what you will say in order and finish with a short view.
coherence
Use clear link words to show how ideas go with each other. Simple words like First, Next, But, Also, In conclusion.
task
State your view in the intro and keep it to the end. Give one or two clear reasons.
content
Give one or two exact examples that fit your point. If you say AI helps work, name a job or task.
content
The topic is set and some ideas are given about how AI may help life.
structure
There is attempt to link tech to work life and life
task
The writer shows a clear aim to state opinion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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