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The table below shows the production of milk annually in four countries in 1990, 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the man features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the production of milk annually in four countries in 1990, 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the man features and make comparisons where relevant.
The table illustrates the annual
milk
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 processing in
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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, Australia, Tanzania, and
Guatemala
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 in 1990, 2000, and 2010.
Overall
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,
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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 had the highest
milk
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production
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 over three decades.
However
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,
Guatemala
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 had the lowest output throughout the
period
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.
To begin
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 with, in 1990, the Netherlands produced 11,262,000
litres
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 of
milk
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,
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 it continued to grow in the next decade by 11,155,000
litres
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. Notably,
at the end
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 of the
period
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, the national
production
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 gained the highest value, by 11,466,000
litres
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.
On the other hand
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,
although
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 Australia claimed 11,246,000
litres
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 in the initial year, it decreased
more
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by more
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 than 100,000
litres
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 in 2000.
Thus
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, the
production
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shrinked
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shrank
 by 9,165,000
litres
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 in 2010. Notably, Tanzania
only
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apply
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produced less than 100,000
litres
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 in 1990.
However
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, it began to rise by 142,000 in the next decade, and pumped their
production
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 to 155,000
litres
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at the end
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 of the
period
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.
Lastly
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,
Guatemala
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 produced only 26,000 in the first year,
then
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 the
production
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 almost doubled in 2000.
At the end
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 of the
period
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,
Guatemala
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 gained 84,000
litres
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 of
milk
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end, however".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words milk, guatemala, production, period, litres with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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