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The line graph below shows the number of cars produced in three regions (Asia, Europe, and America) between 2000 and 2020.

The line graph below shows the number of cars produced in three regions (Asia, Europe, and America) between 2000 and 2020.
The line graph illustrates the
numbers
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number
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 of vehicles that are made in three countries
,
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:
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 Asia, Europe, and America. between 2000 and 2020. Numbers are associated
in
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with
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 millions.
It is clear that
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 Asia stood in the first rank
in
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at
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 the end of the period, whilst America stood at the
last
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,
although
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 it was the highest in the beginning. Europe started as the second most
car produce
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car-producing
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 country and
remained
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maintained
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 its lead
at the end
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 of the period.
To begin
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 with. Asia started the lowest among the other countries,
surprisingly
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surprisingly,
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 it showed a sharp
increasing
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increase
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leading
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, leading
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 it to the first rank.
However
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, America started the highest at
first,
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but
then
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 in 2005 it faced a gradual decrease
between
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until
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 2005
and
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apply
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2020, it reached to around 20 million cars by the end of the period. Europe experienced a slight increase between 2000 and 2010. Afterwards, it increased sharply until 2020, reaching around 40 million cars.

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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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