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Band 2

(Self-owned vs. Rented houses in England and Wales)”

The given chart illustrates the proportion of households in self-owned and tenanted residences in England and Wales in the
year
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 between 1918 and
in
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2011. It is noticeable that some clear trends and patterns can be observed.
Overall
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, the main purpose of
given
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the given
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 information is to highlight the
ratio
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 of self-possessed and hired lodging in two different years (1918, 2011). Looking into more details,
number
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the number
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 of people who live in rented
houses
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 in 1918
increase
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 percentage upto 78%.
Subsequently
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, after
1918
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1918,
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 the fraction of rented
houses
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decrease
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decreased
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. In the
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year
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years
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 between 1939, 1953 a the
ratio
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 remains same
almost
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, almost
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 68%. In the following
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year
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years
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,
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 (1961, 1971, 1981)
the
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, the
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 proportion of hired lodging dropped (58%, 50%, and 40%). After that, there is a drastic change in the percentage of rented accommodation from the
year
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 1991
,
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 2001 to 2011.
On the other hand
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, there are
also
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 fluctuations in the self-owned residence. The
ratio
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 of
self owned
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self-owned
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 accommodation
increase
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increased
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 from 1918 to 2001, but
at the end
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 fraction
decrease
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decreased
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almost
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from 68% to 64%.
Overall
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, the
ratio
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 of people living in rented
houses
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 decreases with the passage of time, but the fraction of people
stayed
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who stay
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 in
her
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their
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 own
houses
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 increases gradually.

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task response
Task response: Tell the full plan at the start. Stay to the chart facts and be exact with numbers and years.
task response
Task response: Give a clear view. Use a short intro and a clear end line that sums the trend.
coherence
Coherence: Use time link words in a steady flow like first, then, after that, finally.
coherence
Coherence: Put rented and owned in clear two parts or paragraphs so the order is easy to follow.
overview
There is a main view of how home choice changes over time.
data usage
The text gives many numbers from the chart to back points.

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