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Nowadays many people choose to be self-employer, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantage of being self-employed?

In recent days has increased the trend to be self-employed.
The
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important
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 percentage of people prefer
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 a business
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 work
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the
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other
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person or company. In
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 essay, I will explain which are the common reasons and I try to explore, the risk for independent workers. In the past, the majority of
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 worked for an
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however
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 year
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. Actually, people search different alternatives to generate incomes, not is only work for a company.
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 I am an excellent chef with delicious
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, I could open a restaurant.
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, in the beginner is a big challenge that demand effort and inversion. In the future, have an own restaurant could be convenience.
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, the start process is the hardest moment for
self-employed
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.
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, since the idea for create a business, self-employer need to answer several questions around the new develop. As
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 as, what kind of food will be served at the new restaurant? Where will
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be location
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? How much is the investment? etc.
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, the key for the success is be constant. The independent worker usually worked overtime, it is important keep focus in the goal. In conclusion, the work market going to change continuo. The workers each time have more option for choose their preferences.
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, new project demand significant effort of time and money,
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, if the business is success, people could be having more advantages around time and profit than if they were employers.

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structure
Make each paragraph start with a clear idea in a short sentence.
content
Give more detail to each idea with a simple example.
language
Use easy grammar and check verb forms and word order.
coherence
Use linking words to show how ideas go with one another.
idea
The topic is clear, and you touch both reasons and risk.
structure
You start well with a general view and give a plan for the essay.

Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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