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The given line chart depicts the number of students who studied in universities abroad from 3 countries The US The UK and Australia over a period of 5 years from 2002 through 2007.

The given line chart depicts the number of students who studied in universities abroad from 3 countries The US The UK and Australia over a period of 5 years from 2002 through 2007.
The given line chart depicts the number of
students
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 who studied in universities abroad from 3 countries
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: The
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The
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the
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 US
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, The
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The
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the
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 UK
and
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, and
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 Australia
over
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, over
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 a
period
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 of 5 years from 2002 through 2007.
Overall
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, it can be clearly seen from the graph that
The
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the
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 number of
students
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 studying abroad in colleges in the US tended to a slight upward trend,
whereas
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,
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apply
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 in
Australia
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Australia,
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 the count of
students
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 always remained stable over the
period
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.
By contrast
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, the figures of the
students
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 in the UK experienced a slow decline over
5-year
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a 5-year
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period
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.
In the
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The
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 US accounted for the highest number of
the
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apply
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students
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 studying overseas at around 49000 by 2002
and
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, and
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 throughout
3
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the 3
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years, the US witnessed a slight drop to about 46000 in 2004 after gradually going up to approximately 50000 in 2007. The data of
students
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 from the UK illustrated a continuous drop from 30000 in 2002 to around 21000 in 2007. Meanwhile, Australia had the lowest figure
about
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for
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students
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 studying
other
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in other
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 countries, and always remained unchanged over the
period
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.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • increase
  • increased
  • increasing
  • rise
  • rose
  • rising
  • grow
  • grew
  • growing
  • up
  • fall
  • fell
  • falling
  • decrease
  • decreased
  • decreasing
  • down
  • upward
  • plateau
  • stable
  • stable
  • trend
  • trends
  • number
  • numbers
  • students
  • US
  • UK
  • Australia
  • country
  • countries
  • paraphrase
  • compare
  • contrast
  • overall
  • year
  • years
  • period
  • describe
  • show
  • patterns
  • growth
  • change
  • year-by-year
  • gradually
  • suddenly
  • significant
  • notable
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