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The line graph shows the percentage of the population living in cities in the Philippines, Malaysia, Thailand and Indonesia from 1970 to 2040

The line graph shows the percentage of the population living in cities in the Philippines, Malaysia, Thailand and Indonesia from 1970 to 2040
The chart illustrates the variations in terms of the proportion of
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people living in the city from four countries
in
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 a 70-year period from 1970 to 2040.
Overall
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,all of the countries experienced an upward trend,as some fluctuations were inevitable.During the years of development,
Malaysia
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 and
Indonesia
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 demonstrated
the
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 dramatic rise
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,
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at the same time,
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Philippines
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the Philippines
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 and
Thailand
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 did not show
such
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markable
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 result. In 1970，
Malaysia
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 and
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Philippines
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the Philippines
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 ranked the highest two
of
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 30%,followed by
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 and
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.During the next two decades,all of them increased by about 20%,
while
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Malaysia
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 surpassed
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Philippines
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the Philippines
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 soon after 1970 and fell behind of
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finally
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. In the middle 30 years from 1990 to 2020,dramatic but continuous growth took place in
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 and
Indonesia
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 ,from 45% to 75% and from 25% to 50%,respectively.
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,
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 remained stable at about 30% and
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Philippines
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 witnessed a decrease in total,to a figure which less than 50%.In the prediction for the coming 20 years,
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 and
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 will
keep on
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 the increasing trend and become the highest ones with 85% and 60%.
Thailand
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 and
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Philippines
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the Philippines
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 will
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changed
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 into the development state ,
improve
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 the share of the amount citizens to around 50%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words malaysia, indonesia, philippines, thailand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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