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The bar chart below shows current health expenditure totals as percentages of GDP* for various European countries for the years 2002, 2007 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows current health expenditure totals as percentages of GDP* for various European countries for the years 2002, 2007 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph illustrates the proportion of gross domestic product (
GDP
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) allocated to
health
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 expenditure in twelve European countries in 2002, 2007, and 2012.
Overall
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, the figures were
reletively
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relatively
 stable across the three periods, with only
modest
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a modest
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 increase in most countries.
Switzerland
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 consistently recorded the highest percentage of
GDP
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 spent on
health
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,
whereas
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Estonia
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 remained at the bottom throughout the period. In 2002,
Switzerland
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 devoted just over 11% of
GDP
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 to
health
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, followed closely by France,
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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, and Belgium, each at around 10%.
By Contrast
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,
Estonia
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 and Lithuania reported the lowest shares, at approximately 4% and 6% respectively. Five years later, most nations
remaind
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remained
 relatively unchanged,
Except
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except
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 France's proportion rose to nearly 11%,
while
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Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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 dropped to 9%. By 2012,
Switzerland
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 maintained its leading position at around 11%, followed by Norway, Denmark and Belgium at 10%. At the other end of the scale,
Estonia
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 continued to spend the smallest proportion, at just under 4%. In summary,
while
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 the
overall
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 percentages of
GDP
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 spent on
health
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 rose marginally in most countries,
Switzerland
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 consistently
recordedd
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recorded
 the highest
percenatge
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percentage
 across all three years, and
Estonia
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 the lowest.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall, while".
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words gdp, health, switzerland, estonia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Gross Domestic Product (GDP)
  • expenditure
  • percentage
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • comparison
  • notable
  • pattern
  • exceptional
  • deviation
  • neighbouring countries
  • economic policies
  • public health
  • data analysis
  • statistical comparison
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