The maps belows show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for it's development. Ye topic hai kitny mery band hai or btyn sai likha ya ghlti

The maps belows show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for it's development. Ye topic hai kitny mery band hai or btyn sai likha ya ghlti
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The maps belows show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for it's development. Ye topic hai kitny mery band hai or btyn sai likha ya ghlti
The given maps
illustrates
Correct subject-verb agreement
illustrate
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the information about the small centre of
Islip
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currently and
it's
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its
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plans
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planned
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development in
future
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.
Overall
Linking Words
,
Islip
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town
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center
Change the spelling
centre
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,
Punctuation problem
apply
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currently
have
Correct subject-verb agreement
has
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few things, but in
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future
Add a comma
future,
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there
are
Wrong verb form
will be
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many changes in
this
Linking Words
town
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.
To begin
Linking Words
with, the
Islip
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town
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center
Change the spelling
centre
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have
Correct subject-verb agreement
has
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countryside on the Northside. Beneath the
countryside
Punctuation problem
countryside,
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there is road
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side
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roadside
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, on
the
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apply
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both sides of
roads
Correct article usage
the roads
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shops
Punctuation problem
, shops
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are present. There is
also
Linking Words
a park on the Southeast
side
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, a
children
Check wording
children's
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playing
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play
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area, and housing schemes
are
Verb problem
apply
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on the north and south sides. On the west
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side
Add a comma
side,
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there is a school for
childre
Correct your spelling
children's
education,
Conversely
Linking Words
,
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Islip
Correct article usage
the Islip
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town
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centre in
future
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has many developments. There are shopping centres for people , where they can buy anything for
herself
Correct pronoun usage
themselves
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. Alongside markets,
car
Correct article usage
a car
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parking area
Linking Words
also
Verb problem
is also
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present .
Transportation
Correct article usage
The transportation
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system
Linking Words
also
Verb problem
was also
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updated,
a
Change preposition
with a
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bus station on the
north east
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northeast
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side
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. There is
also
Linking Words
a road for pedestrians only. New housing schemes are
also
Linking Words
build
Wrong verb form
built
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on both
northeast
Correct article usage
the northeast
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and southwest sides. The dual carriageway will
also
Linking Words
construct
Wrong verb form
be constructed
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.
Overall
Linking Words
,
Islip
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town
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centre
currently has
Verb problem
is
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not well developed, but in
future
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there will be many advancements. I believe that with the passage of time
town
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moved towards progress.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, overall".
Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words islip, future, town, side with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the seventh paragraph.
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