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These days more and more people are going to other countries for a significant period of time either to find a job or to study. There are clearly many benefits to doing this, but people who live abroad can also face some difficulties. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of living and working in a foreign country.

Society is very different today from the past . Many
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 today travel to get a job or study . It is an excellent way to get a job or study .
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 essay will explain the advantages and disadvantages of living and working abroad . Living and working abroad has multiple advantages . First ,
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 can gain new skills and languages .
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 , they can learn a language by living or studying there .
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 , it can enhance many skills , especially communication skills . Second ,
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 can get a high income .
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 , some countries support
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 to study in it by paying money .
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 ,
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 can have better jobs than in their own country.
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 ,
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 can have new friends .
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, they can have excellent relationships .
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, they may have friends from different countries.
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, there are some disadvantages .
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some
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 feel alone .
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 feeling
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 can get homesick.
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 , some
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 can feel depressed.
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 , some
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 can not come to their country
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 friends . Second , they can experience culture shock. Sometimes, there is a huge difference in cultures and lifestyles , so
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 must be able to deal with it .
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 , there are different roles and fans in some countries .
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 , it may cost a lot of money .
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, they will pay for everything ,
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 as food and cars. In conclusion, living and working abroad have great advantages.
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, there are some real disadvantages.
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 should select based on what they feel.

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task response
Start with a clear intro that says what you will talk about.
coherence
Use clear links between ideas. Use words like first, also, and finally.
content
Give clear examples for each point, not only ideas.
language
Check grammar and fix mistakes like spelling and punctuation.
content
You state both good and bad sides.
content
The ideas about skill and pay are easy to follow.
style
Sentences are short and simple.

Your opinion

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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