The two pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production in france in two years (1995 and in 2005)

The two pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production in france in two years (1995 and in 2005)
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The two pie charts illustrate the proportion of five
sources
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of
energy
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production
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(coal,
gas
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, petrol, nuclear and other
sources
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) in France in two distinct
years
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(1995 and 2005).
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, in both
years
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,
gas
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and coal contributed about half of all
energy
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production
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in both
years
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,
while
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other
sources
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were the least
one
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apply
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. There was only a very minimal increase in coal and
gas
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production
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,
whereas
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nuclear and other
sources
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almost doubled. Petrol was the only source which saw a decrease in its
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.
Energy
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produced by coal comprised 29.80% in 1995 , and by 2005, it increased by about 1% from 29.63% to 30.31% .
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, the amount of
energy
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generated by
gas
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went up approximately 1% from 29.80% in the first year to 30.93% by the final year. The use of nuclear power rose significantly from 4.90% in 1995 to 9.10% in 2005.
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, other
sources
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of
production
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accounted for 4.90% but
then
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climbed to 9.10%.
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, petrol produced 29.27% of all
energy
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in 1995 , but 10
years
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later, only 19.55% of
energy
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came from
this
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source.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sources, energy, production, gas, years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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