Some people says that, history is one of the most important school subject. other people think, in todays world, subject like science and technology are more important than history. Discuss both of the views and give your opinion

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history
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is one of the most important school
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there are some
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think subjects like
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and
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are more important. In
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show both of the views and give my opinion On the one
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history
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is very important because
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teaches us who
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we are and helps to find our own place
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show
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how
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find food and
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for it
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teach
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us how to
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our mentality and the real owners of the place that we live
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and
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us to live in comfort,
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helps
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students find material way better and faster.
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can be more useful for
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people
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that
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can't communicate in real life
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provide
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social media platforms and
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communication systems
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it provides more working places
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social media marketing, influencer Both subjects
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value
history
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you
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who you are
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and
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communicate and
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find
things that you need faster I think
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subject it's good for
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self but in my own
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if you learn
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and
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science
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you can search your
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and more that
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writen
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in the books

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task response
To raise task score, add a clear answer to the question, give more detail on each view and finish with a strong personal opinion.
coherence cohesion
To raise flow, use easy link words like first, next, for example, also, but, so, therefore and keep each idea on one line.
content
You mention both views and give your own view.
development
You show your own opinion at the end.

Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • history
  • subject
  • important
  • world
  • today
  • science
  • technology
  • discuss
  • view
  • opinion
  • lesson
  • past
  • future
  • culture
  • identity
  • democracy
  • law
  • decision
  • problem
  • solution
  • progress
  • health
  • energy
  • job
  • change
  • risk
  • evidence
  • example
  • compare
  • balance
  • curriculum
  • citizen
  • learning
  • ethics
  • context
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